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Farewell to thee, brave soldier of the desert sands
We bid thee goodbye, in lasting peace and serenity
Fallen warrior, find providence in the cold night
Let your footsteps fall in steadfast grace
On the path illuminated by His torch

It’s pure light burning as brightly as the wisps of Fêng-Huang

May your journey find you at peace, dear Brother,
Once you cross those lonely roads
Fallen warrior, leave behind thy memory to blaze
Fervently aglow in our hearts an eternity’s depth
Your Honour never forgotten, sung for generations

Do not hesitate to go unto thy fate, we will soon follow

And those who still dwell this living Earth,
Remember his name not in pain or sorrow
Nay, for he will dwell in the golden fields of Elysium,
Forevermore glorious in eternal rest
Amongst those who bore fame the Halls of Valhalla

Fallen warrior, phoenix returning to the ashes.
So here it is - the 100/200-hits (since I took so bloody long getting around to it >.< ) deviation.

Considering recent events [link] , I decided to dedicate it to my brother, Salman (better known as Sal to the world).

However, I'm not sure I put it in the right category (Spiritual Ballad). Reasoning for my choice was that it's theme was Death, and had several references to various religous and spiritual beliefs. Whether it would be considered a Ballad by some, I don't know but I chose to put it in that grouping because it best explains the style I had originally written it in (the original not being in English. This is merely a translation at best).

For those of you who don't know much - or anything - about him and/or are curious about certain things in the poem, I'll try and give a quick summary now. Yes, theres several references to various Classical myths particularly surrounding the Afterlife - it's because he was obsessed with them. He loved studying literature and mythology, particularly the variations cultures had when depicting death and the afterlife.

Moreover, the lines that stand alone in itallics have personal meaning between me and him, sayings which he used often and believed.

I also made references to the legend of the Phoenix, because that's what he was referred to by friends and loved ones as a joke (number of reasons behind that one too). He liked them and his 'element symbol' was fire.

Anyway, enough babble from me on that - hope you all enjoy, criticisms are more than welcome but be warned I may not heed them this time around. Because this is a tribue to my brother, not something I would consider an actual deviation. Enjoy!
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Quicksilver1 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2007
I like it.
for two reasons

1. it show how much you love your brother
2.I am a sucker for anything pertaning to valhalla
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2007
Hah! You and him both - in fact, if he were here right now he'd be going bonkers over your icon/avatar. Thanks for commenting, and for the fav. Greatly appreciated :)
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Quicksilver1 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2007
I like the first comment signiture

confucius am I right?
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2007
Mine or DMajorBoss's? Mine is Harriet Beecher Stowe, not too sure about Major's. I'll have to ask him for you next time I see him.
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Quicksilver1 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2007
"The bitterest tears shed over graves are for words left unsaid and deeds left undone." confucius
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2007
Ah right that one. First time I've heard that its from Confucius, but I'll have to take your word for it, as I'm not too sure myself.
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Quicksilver1 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2007
good I found that out because they used that quote on an episode of Criminal Minds

(and people say you can't learn from TV) :)
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2007
lol awesome :D thanks for sharing again mate
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blue-nodachi Featured By Owner May 19, 2007
wow! that was amazing! I feel retarded that I haven't looked at this until now,... sorry...so sorry.
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aribasultan Featured By Owner May 21, 2007
lol nonsense, don't be silly - I know how busy life can get - believe me ^^; Glad you took the time to look at it in the end though, thank you :)
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TalonAlmasy Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2007
I'm not so good with words some times, but I'm sorry to hear about your brother, this is a wonderful poem,and as Ray Bradbury in Fahrenheit 451 said


"Everyone must leave something behind when he dies, my grandfather said. A child or a book or a painting or a house or a wall built or a pair of shoes made. Or a garden planted. Something your hand touched some way so your soul has somewhere to go when you die, and when people look at that tree or that flower you planted, you’re there. It doesn’t matter what you do, he said, so as long as you change something from the way it was before you touched it into something that’s like you after you take your hands away."

May you all find peace.
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aribasultan Featured By Owner May 9, 2007
That's a beautiful quote, thank you so much :hug: I will remember that, as well as use it to help console my family members :) Thanks again so much
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XsphinxX2784 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hey u, i love this piece. i love it. ur one of my favorite writers now...i wonder if u would write something specific for me? perhaps we ccould talk about it later i gotta jet unfortunately
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2007
glad you like it hun, its appreciated - means a lot coming from you :) and sure I'd love to do that, email or note me about it whenever you want - we still need to discuss that Pegasus Dream collab.
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Agent-Angel Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
erk, finally got around to reading it ^^; VERY wonderful! Well worth the wait :hug:
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2006
lol no problem hun, thanks.
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mikahniamhjonas Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2006
Sis that was beautiful, well done. I'm certain he would be proud to read this from you.

~Mikah
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2006
Thanks hun, greatly appreciated.

p.s - good to see you pottering about on DA again :)
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mikahniamhjonas Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2006
yeah i've been offline since about... friday, can u believe it? I don't like being online at my parents (snoopy family >.<;) and monday well... monday was a write off cause i went out. Tuesday lazy and i finaly convinced the laptop it does love me today so i'm back in action! which is just as well cause I have a deviation or two to get on with.

~Mikah
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2006
lol well in that case welcome back - look foward to seeing your deviations!!
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chessecake-gal Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2006
tis so very beautiful. :hug: =).
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2006
Thanks hun! :):hug:
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Zjeenonji Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2006
Very Beautiful.. I love it. I think u did a wounderful job!

:hug:
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2006
Aw, thanks hun glad you liked it. :hug:
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Zjeenonji Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2006
:D :hug:
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2006  Professional Writer
Very well done, my friend. I know the pain of loss as well; though, I do think that the loss of a brother may be much greater than the loss of a good friend.

I understood the references in this quite well, and I feel that it is very touching; I'm sure that he is honored in his eternal rest.

Thank you for sharing this, my friend.
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2006
And thank you for the kind words, I'm glad someone gets it at least - he was very adamant in his search for knowledge, particularly that of the Classical nature. Sadly my family has incurred many losses, as I have personally in friends and loved ones, he isn't the first of my brothers to go - nor the first of our generation. :(

But hopefully not only will he, but the others, find at least something in this poem. The original will be sent via scroll to the family tomb where hopefully if its 'passed' by the literary Masters of my family it will hang.
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2006  Professional Writer
As one who is knowledgeable in classical things, I do believe that this will be enjoyed by all; I hope that this will be accepted by your family.

I also send forth my condolences to you and all of those who have had a loss within your family.
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2006
Thanks, it's greatly appreciated. And thanks again for the condolences, I'll be sure to pass them on. Hopefully another death won't follow any time too soon.
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2006  Professional Writer
*hugs*
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aribasultan Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2006
:) thanks hun *hugs back*
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